Shades of Gray

Well...  It's been longer than a month.  I'm sorry guys, I'm having some serious writer's block.  I received some negative and I mean negative feedback and I'm not sure if it's that or what's been happening in my personal life or both... but I am really trying.  I have a excerpt from my 1,000 page book for you.  It's called Shades of Gray and it's finished however it too is in the editing process.  And I can't stress this enough!

THIS IS A 1ST DRAFT IT HAS NOT BEEN EDITED, AT ALL, READ FOR CONTENT ONLY NOT GRAMMAR OR PUNCTUATION.  

Prologue

     Haley waits for his return.  He will return and it will begin.  She stands, pacing the room anxious to have it begin… and end.  She will never give up Jake.  But the Machine takes what it wants. It devours who it will and she might not have that choice.  She might not even remember it.

     She makes a clean sweep of the room a circle of the bed which has controlled the room and their time together.  She shivers at the lengths she’s gone to already to protect her son.  But he is more important than her, Toby, Davidson or the crazy world this has become. He’s the only one who can save them from the insanity of Karisha.

     She thinks of Toby and longs for him.  Not what he’s become but the strength he’s always been, before he was beaten by the Machine—Davidson’s Machine.  He’d been the one dragging her along a course she’d fought against, and now fights for.

     She takes a sharp breath as she hears the key in the lock.  He has returned…

This is just the prologue of course but tell me what you think?   Well thought out comments are welcome.  Thanks peeps!